After principal Tonya King denied junior Jim Stack’s request to grow his hair out for the organization Locks of Love, the school board will meet and vote this Monday.
“Had I approved Jim’s request, then I would have students every day asking if they could also break the dress code,” King said. “We have rules for a reason we can’t go breaking them anytime we want.”
The school dress code states that male students’ hair must be no longer than collar length and must be of natural color. Student council wrote a letter to the school board regarding this issue, 300 students signed the letter, and 150 students were willing to grow their hair out, 78 of these students were guys.
“I don’t see what the big deal is anyway,” student council president Gilbert Castillo said. “Girls have long hair, and no one is distracted. Rules were made to be broken, and this is a very good reason to break one.”
King suggested to raise money instead.
“He could have a fundraiser and donate money to the organization,” King said. “I would be more than willing to help with the fundraiser.
Stack had a conversation on the phone with Locks of Love president Gisel Roco, and it was clear they needed hair. The charity receives about 200 requests every month for wigs for sick children, and they have to turn down about 150.
“We desperately need human hair for our wigs.” Roco said.
Locks of Love wrote a letter to the school board saying that Stack had applied to be a donor and had his parents’ permission. The school board will discuss the issue Monday.
“I can’t comment on this issue right now,” school board president Bill Valdez said. “We will discuss it at the board meeting.”
1. take out ON in the first paragraph
2. KING said in paragraph two
3. some of your paragraphs don’t make sense.
4. good transitions
5. good quote
6. not picking sides. good
good.
1. Very Good quote choice.
2. Your ideas flowed together in order.
3. You ended well not lacing it one sided.
Need to work on.
1. indent your paragraphs
2. you have a few typos.
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Good:
1.Flows smoothly
2.Gives good information
3.Good elaboration about the quotes and what they mean
What to work on:
1.Check for spelling errors
2.Try to put in your lead what they are voting for
3.Maybe cut down on the length
After principal Tonya King denied junior Jim Stack’s request to grow his hair out for the organization Lock of Love, the school board will meet and vote this Monday. ADD AN S ON LOCK.
“Had I approved Jim’s request, then I would have students every day asking if they could also break the dress code,” King said. “We have rules for a reason we can’t go breaking them anytime we want.”
The school dress code states that male students’ hair must be no longer than collar length and must be of natural color. Student council wrote a letter to the school board regarding this issue. TELL US MORE ABOUT THE SPECIFICS OF THE LETTER.
“I don’t see what the big deal is anyway,” student council president Gilbert Castillo said. “Girls have long hair, and no one is distracted. Rules were made to be broken, and this is a very good reason to break one.”
King suggested to raise money instead.
“He could have a fundraiser and donate money to the organization,” King said. “I would be more than willing to help with the fundraiser.
Stack had a conversation on the phone with Locks of Love president Gisel Roco, and it was clear they needed hair. The charity receives about 200 requests every month for wigs for sick children, and they have to turn down about 150.
“We desperately need human hair for our wigs.” Roco said.
Locks of Love wrote a letter to the school board saying that Stack had applied to be a donor and had his parents’ permission. The school board will discuss the issue next Monday. NO NEXT
“I can’t comment on this issue right now,” school board president Bill Valdez said. “We will discuss it at the board meeting next week.” JUST TAKE NEXT WEEK OUT OF THIS QUOTE. IT IS CONFUSING.
GREAT JOB!! YOU ARE ON THE RIGHT TRACK!